Peer Review over First Draft of Research Thesis

George Lewis Hughes

English 103: Accelerated Composition – Observation

Daniel Richards

October 29, 2008

Peer-Review Session over First Draft of Research Argument

The most difficulty I encountered with composing my first draft involved determining which segments of my more personalized influence on the thesis were truly legitimate enough to be accepted as part of the formal, finalized product of my Research Argument. Therefore, to no surprise, the bulk of the criticism I received from one of my classmates on the day of peer reviewing complied with my indecision on which of the first-person content in my argument actually qualified as appropriate enough for such a formal assignment as this particular task. Nevertheless, I was pleased to receive the feedback with which I was most concerned, that which consulted the anecdotal narratives from the interview I had given with a live combat veteran. I was heavily reliant upon this particular component of my thesis to be the cookie which lands the most positive influence on the reader, thereby making way for the more directly anticipated positive feedback. Alas, my interview-involved material paid off as I had hoped.

Observation on Personal Revision Process

George Lewis Hughes

English 103: Accelerated Composition – Observation

Daniel Richards

November 10, 2008

My Own Revision Process

It goes without saying that my revision process depends upon the addressed faults with my earlier drafts of my work. Most of the time, however, my revisions entail attempting to mold the content of my compositions back into a coherent manner of adhering to the basal argument I am really attempting to discuss, aside from the digressions I find myself all too often stumbling into and then obsessing over. In this light, my papers are to no surprise usually longer in their final-product forms of most than those of the majority of my fellow peers. Then again, I find it most trying of all for myself to take on the dire challenge of weeding out that which is least credential to my central statement. I am usually the victimized prisoner of my own habit which involves the indecision which articles of the composition should be removed, or whether even anything at all should be purged from the otherwise incomplete document in the first place. On that note, it is not difficult to perceive how my revision process might not be a very consistently executed or methodical ritual on my part.

Initial Multimedia Brainstorming Exercise

George Lewis Hughes

English 103: Accelerated Composition – Initial Brainstorm

Daniel Richards

November 10, 2008

Ideas for the Multimedia Argument Assignment

I am thinking that our group should pursue a satirical crusade against Clemson campus’s squirrel population, since they have actually managed to assume responsibility over the past several months for several cases of power damages. I am not exactly sure, however, how we should be cable of enacting or enforcing such a rather farfetched proposal. How could we make it ethically credible? Is there actually a sufficient enough portion of the campus population that we could depend upon to support our group out of their necessarily conservative political views? What would be the best mode of communication for us to reach out to the expectedly disinterested campus body? There have not been very many other credible imperfections we have been able to pinpoint during our initial brainstorming process of group collaboration. Thus, this whole squirrel challenge just might prove to be our best shot at an interesting topic of choice for the time being, unless something more provocative rears its imperfect head.

Group Conference Observation

George Lewis Hughes

English 103: Accelerated Composition – Observation

Daniel Richards

November 24, 2008

The Success Regarding the Fudds’ Conference over an Action Storyboard

Our group collaboration in preparation for our showcase of the storyboard for our final Multimodal Project was not painstakingly endured. Rather, it was quite prolific to the extent that my introduction of the idea that we should do squirrels as our topic of choice for an imperfection on the college campus regarding the species’ apparent overpopulation as evidenced by two successive, squirrel-caused, campus power outages within the span of a month was well received with immediate signs of excitement. With that dispute settled we proceeded with our plan of action. I was mostly concerned with the actual process of getting the campus body to react to our proposal. Thus, the storyboard took shape about this perspective notion of a necessary plan involving the stair-stepped style of processional approach towards the ultimate goal of getting an eager, well-informed audience, whom we would eventually entail to become our primary, supporting body advocate.

Multi-Perspective Rhetorical Activity

Union Soldier in Photograph – “I was a dispatch rider carrying an important note to Oklahoma’s main fort, when I stumbled upon a cloaked man in a flamboyant hat kneeling over what appeared to be a man’s body. ‘A veteran – Union,’ the man specified, without my understanding, until he added, ‘Scalped…by an Injun.’

· Photographer – “I was so fortunate this day to stumble upon a dead man’s body, which I could photograph. So fortuitous an encounter, that I had everything at hand while in route to the City. I had the bystanders move the body and pose a bit more dramatically for me, of course, but to such a robust result.”

· Observer: a Young Boy – “I saw him – the man – riding over that Indian burial ground – drunk as hell – cursing them Injuns as they dug a fresh grave. That lead one – Bronco, I think was his name – did not even hesitate to grab that pitiful swaggard off his horse and peel his scalp clean off with the edge of a vintage Bouie knife he had inherited from various wars of the past. I should know of course…’cause I’m a local.”

Storyboard

Storyboard for English 103

Group 2: “The Fudds”

· Twelve percent of all power outages in the United States are caused by squirrels shorting power-plant transformers; not to mention only roughly thirty-five percent of all power lines run above ground. Therefore, where they actually can be a nuisance, squirrels are essentially responsible for approximately – at least – forty percent of all above-ground power outages.

· Our two modes of communication will be via a wide variety of captioned, sloganed poster designs, which will in turn connect to a link to our webpage, on which will be opted a survey-petition regarding the overpopulation of squirrels and whether or not the student body should take action.

· On the website we will display a letter of agreement which will be linked to a separate, newly created, email account, specifically reserved for receiving these responses. With this data we can derive statistical evidence and percentages of which responders accepted or declined the proposal for population management control.

· We will be advertising against feeding the squirrels, such that they might feel less accustomed to people, thereby feeling unwelcome in this strictly collegiate habitat.

· We will encourage our readership to make squirrels feel as uncomfortable as possible, using brute force within the constraints of legality and reason (evil eyes are preferable).

Survey Movie-Preview Design

George Lewis Hughes

English 103: Accelerated Composition – Collaborative Exercise

Daniel Richards

December 5, 2008

Survey of Designing Movie-Preview Ads: Mock-Announcer Narrative

“In a world where war was way of living, a sniper became a legend. But there was one thing that kept stopping him from taking on the world: he was a woman. Her name was Varsila Frychef. Based on an incredible true story about honor, courage, and the will to fight – she broke all the rules to make her name what it deserved to become. One woman; one way – Feminist Productions Incorporated brings you a heart-stopping, epic drama, one with trauma, conspiracy, and fate. Experience what it is like to live the life of a troubled woman in Soviet Russia during the Battle of Stalingrad. And what is more…..the film also brings you…a musical comedy. What will it take? To take on Nazi Germany’s sniper ace, who is also a woman. Starring no one you have ever heard of, The New York Times is calling this one ‘an epic thrill ride,’ ‘a must-see movie; one that will change your life forever.’ When Hitler knocked on the door with Helga, remember that Stalin always knocked back with Varsila. Wherever you would find the heat of combat on the Russian tundra, so, too, would you find Varsila, the Night-Fox. Double the action – ‘LOOK OUT!’ Triple the excitement – ‘LOOK OUT AGAIN!!!’ Fry chef by day, sniper by night, this movie is one that will blow your mind clean out of the back of your skull like you just got owned by Varsila’s deadly accuracy. Roger Ebert says, ‘I loved this movie.’ So come see the true underdog of the World War II. Don’t miss out on this awesome opportunity…..to see – ‘NOOOOO!!!!!’ – Killing Major Helga. Rated R, for sustained sequences of extreme, realistic, graphic war violence, disturbing images, gore, language, thematic elements, rude humor, and a whole lot more that I don’t feel like telling you about because I’m way past my cigarette break.”